别出心裁的开发信，欢迎各位莅临指导
哈，本人新入行，现正在艰难的开发客户中，看了网上各位前辈的开发信，本人也小露一手，贴出来供大家交流指导，嘿，如果能给本人带来一笔小生意，哪怕订单再小，将感激不尽，万谢images/smilies/loveliness.gif
wechat: chuck0712
If you are happened to open this mail, then I should thank God, but if you continue reading, well, I should be thankful for your kindness, as I am sitting in my chair right now to write this message, even though I don't know what will be going on next , maybe it is just being sent to a wrong address or will be blocked by the spam filter at the worst,
Anyway you can call me Chuck and I am newly to a company which specializes in LED lights products, while I just thought this industry has a bright future and more and more LEDs are applying to our cities,buildings, and rural areas, which guided me decide on this type of occupation. Luckily our company MasonLED has a great vision that I can keep the same pace with, to be an advocator of Technology Make Our Places Better,so that is why we entered in this field at 2002,now we have 4 major product categories: Street Lights, Flood Lights, High Bays, Tri-proof Lights, which were widely used in Urban roads, High mast, Parking lot, Stadium, Court, Warehouse, Courtyard, Supermarket and other indoor public/private places.
It's getting dark here, stars are not twinkling in the sky usually due to the rainy days in early summer in the south, but it is still brightly lit outside of the window, on the street, in each airport or factory, people are bustling in and out, working, talking and enjoying, we respect for those who made contributions to mankind, and it inspires us to improve the quality of living with the constant efforts.
You see, curiosity is a magic power to break down the barriers between people, just like the lights at night, lonely but powerful, you can be assured that our first cooperation would be delightful, even though it may need to across the ocean, as we are in China, where can support us to chase the dreams with confidence, to achieve what the forerunners like PHILIPS or OSRAM have achieved. Actually, as a leader in the industrial and municipal lighting field in China market, Mason has successively achieved its great success in some large lighting projects both in several domestic cities like Shenzhen, Beijing, Macao and in overseas countries like Germany, Chile and Japan etc.
At last, your encouragement will illuminate us , then our products will illuminate the people around the world!
Contact us for the latest catalogue and prices, or if there is anything we can do to help, please let me know.
Furthermore, we would like to provide you with LED lighting components and customization service.
Best regards,
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给你个参考的
https://cdn.nlark.com/yuque/0/2019/png/209822/1555754384398-ce256878-7bbe-4f7b-b1b9-48755ba5ab6a.png
[ 本帖最后由 qiudiss 于 2019-4-20 18:00 编辑 ]
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I am newly to a company,别人尽量都要装专业，你这倒好，直接是新人。 哪个客户敢理你
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谢谢指教
点评很棒
太长了，换位思考下，你如果收到一个邮件洋洋洒洒写了一堆，你有看下去的耐心吗
哈哈，有空的时候我也会看一下的。
actually like a long shit
It’ a shame to bother you like this ......shame会不会太严重了哇
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哈，体内有湿气才会long shit
shame 也有羞愧，遗憾的意思
个人觉得你的开发信太长了，很少会有人有耐心的看这么长的邮件，下面有个很好的版本，让人一目了然，而且还有产品图片
嗯嗯，多谢指教，我也在采用下面的那个模式。
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