各位达人，发几个广交会回来后的开发信，请各位指点一二，哪些不足。
Dear Vipul Ghelani,Good day.
We would like to thank you for your visit to our booth. It is our honor to meet you at the exhibition.
I am very careful to learn your products from your company website www.xxxx.com and we are glad to know that your company is a renowned company has seen immense growth in just few years of its establishment in 1994. PHPL is a manufacturer of petrol, diesel & LPG portable generating sets with its offices and dealer networks all over India.
Just like we have communicated at the Canton Fair, we are one of the leading professional manufactures of water dispenser, water purifier, water system etc.
After our communication there and find there is a chance for us to have wide and larger cooperation for our mutual benefit business. and thank you for your inquiry of water dispenser (X-70, X-60).
Waiting for your reply soon! Hope a prosperous future between us!
Best regards
Aaron
Dear Ashfaque Sada B.E.
We would like to thank you for your visit to our booth and showing interest in our products at the Canton Fair. We visited your company website www.ai.com and we are glad to know that your company is professionally managed company widely known in the emirates and the middle east. Aikah was founded in the year 1979.
As we discussed at the Canton Fair, as you know we are is one of the leading professional manufactures of xxx (5-12kw), xxx(10-30hp), xxxx etc. And we adopt best components, such as BOSCH Injector and SKF main bearing, with good stability.
As you asked, We are glad to send you our catalog for your evaluation, please specify the items interest to you, or send us your detailed specification, the exact quotation will be sent upon request.
Waiting for your reply soon! Hope a prosperous future between us!
Best regards
Aaron
Dear Jakcy Lee,
Good day and hope you have a good harvest at the Canton Fair. Thank you for your visiting to our booth. It's our honor to meet you at the Canton Fair.
This is Winsun Power Co.,Ltd, which is one of the leading professional manufacturers of xxx (5-12kw), xxxx(10-30hp) etc. we adopt the best components such as BOSCH Injector and SKF Main Bearing, with good stability.
As we talked at the Canton Fair, you are interested in our company xxx, now I want to send you our detail catalogue for your further reference, please kindly check the attached files.
Your comments on our products or any information on your market demand will be really appreciated. We looking forward to your specific inquirys.
Waiting for your reply soon! Hope a prosperous future between us!
Best regards
Aaron
感觉是不是太长了点
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lz
我也觉得太长了点我平时都这么写：
Deare：
how are you doing .
i am .............. we are ......specialized in.........
i noticed that you are interested in........
i am looking.....
结尾就没有了 ， 太长了看了花眼了哦
你这个广交会后的邮件有点长，啰嗦
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附上一些交谈的图片或许更好
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