Dear Mr. James Likangaga：
Nice day!
This is Lyle from Guangdong Qinxin Technology Co.，Ltd which focuses on commercial induction cooker in China for 15 years. I’m writing to you for possible business in the future. Thank you.
It was our pleasure to meet you at Guangzhou Canton Fair last year where we show you a series of our product.
Our commercial induction cooker have gathered a lot of attention in the Marketplace.We believe that you can reply on us as we can provide you satisfactory service and product with best quality and most competitive price in the world. Thank you.
Do you need our product catalog? Please contact me anytime if you have any other questions! Thank you.
Looking forward to your reply!
Yours faithfully,
Lyle
1.which focuses on commercial induction cooker in China for 15 years-------用现在完成（进行）时更好，且句子过长
2.It was ------last year ----we show ---------时态不对啊，且累赘（a series of our product.）
3Our commercial induction cooker have gathered a lot of attention in the Marketplace.We believe that you can reply on us as we can provide you satisfactory service and product with best quality and most competitive price in the world--------太累赘
4.Do you need our product catalog? Please contact me anytime if you have any other questions! Thank you.--------我一定不回你
发表于 2018-10-8 17:14:00
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